I like all of the different small vignettes. It’s like a mix-tap or an album where longer songs are separated by skits or shorter songs.

I wonder if it would be easier to read if there was more of a physical separation between vignettes that are unrelated. Like a line or a heading or a number. I sometimes spend the first paragraph wondering if what I’m reading is a new thing or if it ties in to the previous thing. Of course, that may be your intention with the stream of consciousness style! So take or leave this comment, it depends on your intention.